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Violanthe
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PostBloodseek by Toni V. Sweeney

Posted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 9:50 am
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How does this opener strike you?

When the red raw mists cleared, he was alone.

That was how the Mortuaries found him--face down in the bloody slush where the heat from his body had melted the snow--the black war-horse standing guard above him. They had to blindfold the animal to lead it away, for it bared its teeth and struck at them, determined to protect its master even at the cost of his own life.



If you've never read this book, or had no clue where the opener comes from, then how does it strike you? If you had only this opener to go on, would you read more? Does it grab you and spur you to read on? Or does it leave you unenthusiastic?

If you read the book it came from, did you remember right away or did you have to look it up? What made it so memorable - or not so memorable?

If you are interested to read on, then do a search on the opening line and tell us what it is.
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pecooper
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2007 9:45 pm
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It sets up a situation and makes you want to find out what happened and what is going to happen. It would definitely make me want to read further, except for one thing, the name of those who found the hero, "The Mortuaries."

As intriguing as it sounds, I don't really want to know about a world where funeral parlors go exploring battlefields and blindfolding horses. In fact, I'm trying to purge the vision from my brain. The author needs to be more careful in picking names and the editor needs be shot for allowing it.
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Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 10:33 am
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I agree. The imagery doesn't quite draw me in.
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