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Violanthe
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PostTry this Opener! (11/21)

Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 12:48 pm
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How does this opener strike you?

Farlee watched Dabreze dance as he worked his way through the crowd and carefully practiced his profession: stealing. She watched him just as he watched her. It wasn't his imagination. She glanced at all those staring at her, but her dark eyes followed him everywhere. He'd always loved those dark, magnetic eyes.


If you've never read this book, or had no clue where the opener comes from, then how does it strike you? If you had only this opener to go on, would you read more? Does it grab you and spur you to read on? Or does it leave you unenthusiastic?

If you read the book it came from, did you remember right away or did you have to look it up? What made it so memorable - or not so memorable?
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Posted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 5:03 pm
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I don't know where it's from, but I would read more. On the plus side, it has active characters doing something illegal but not horrible, on the minus side, it might be a romance.
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Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 10:10 am
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What makes it seem like a romance to you?
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Posted: Tue Nov 28, 2006 3:20 pm
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The two last sentences. Meaningful glances thrown between a man and a woman across a crowd of people. A person's movement is compared to dancing.
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Posted: Mon Dec 04, 2006 11:43 am
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Indeed, meaningful glances do smack of romance.
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